Twinkling Starz

Here I am, alone I walk Down roads of rocks and ice. There’s no one here with which to talk They left after giving advice. The third line needs a ...

I like the way you ended each stanza with stating that something is over. It really gave flavor to the poem. I know lyric poetry is not supposed to have ...

I don't like the last stanza much, the image there disgusts me, but I think it's a good ending, good work. I would have to say that the first stanza ...

I like the way you chose your words, this poem is very good. I really liked it, and great work. My favorite stanza: forgetting that X's ever existed forgetting to ...

Sorry if I offended you or anything, but I didn't mean that I can't deal with it. I can. I'm saying that others younger might not like the fact that ...

Yeah, I don't think sparrow goes well with this poem. Great work! It kinda has a quick pace, I like that about it. I hope the teacher liked it, because ...

I agree with Incandescence, I didn't feel any emotions or anything in the poem. I suggest you edit it and have more feeling, maybe make it longer. I don't like ...

I always hated that cold, dead doll, Good details, there. The one with the straight-through stare, The one who sat aloft and watched, The one who couldn't care. I like ...

In the air, Between the trees, You can feel The cool morning breeze. I love the first stanza, it's a good opening sentence. Up in the trees, A bird if ...

I really like this poem, good work. The heat of summer does not taint me, Neither before monsoon, I bent my knee. Red roses can no more pamper my soul, ...

The nurses were bantering, their nonsense never ending I like "bantering", good adjective. Like a long, rolling waterfall from the top and down And as I lie and I wait ...

I think this poem was a lovely read, but very short. You might need to go over it a little and change the words a bit. Yep, I've never seen ...